Target 18 – Using a Revision Checklist

when you respond to the writing tasks you need to leave a few  minutes at the end of

For each task to revise your writing you need to check that you responded to all parts of 

the task. you need to make sure that your ideas are well organized and that you used

correction age and pronunciation Biere is a checklist that you can use and your

The wash you need to make sure you want and that you

revision

REVISION CHECKLIST

Responding to the Task

Dini, I  complete the task

Did I write enough words

Did I complete the task on time?

Coherence and Cohesion

Didi write a thesis statement

Did I write a temple sentence for each paragraph

Did I write supporting details in each paragraph

Did I write a conclusion?

Lexical Resource

Did I use transition werden

Did use a variety of vocabulary?

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

Die i vise parallel structures

Did use a variety of sentence patterns?

Did I use correct spelling and punctuation?

Look at the following model writing task and response from Tarrer Notice how the response

can be checked against the revision checklist.

Academic Task 2

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task

There should be hours to control the amount and ope of Holence

shown on television programs.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge

or experience

Write at least 250 words

While it is true that there is violence on television, each individual has

his or her own idea about how much is too much. Fortunately, we are

all free to choose which TV programs we want to watch Laws are not

necessary to help us decide.

It isn’t difficult to find out which programs are on TV at any given

time. Most newspapers publish a schedule of TV programs every day.

Also, anyone who watches TV regularly knows which programs she likes

and which she doesn’t like. She knows what kinds of programs each

different channel tends to have. Because of this, it’s easy for everyone

to avoid violent programs if they want to.

Modern technology has given us a tool for controlling the TV

programs we see. Most TVs can be programmed to block certain

channels. Thus, parents have a way to protect their children from

seeing shows that are too violent. Adults can also use this technology

to avoid seeing programs that they don’t want to see.

The best thing about TV is that there is a variety of programs. There

are news programs for serious people. There are movies and cartoons

for people who want to be entertained. A variety of TV programs

show violence.

needs to be protected, even if that means allowing some of them to

We each have our own ideas about what is too violent and what

isn’t. It would be difficult to make laws about violence on TV that would

satisfy everybody. It is better to let each individual make his or her own

choice about what to watch.

Responding to the Task

REVISION CHECKLIST

Responding to the Task

Did I complete the task?

Did I write enough words?

 Did I complete the task on time?

Did 1 Complete the Task?

The task asks the writer to agree or disagree with the statement. The last sentence of the first

necessary to help us decide, states the writer’s disagreement. The task

also asks for reasons and examples. The second, third, and fourth paragraphs each explain

the reason for the writer’s opinion, and they include examples to explain and support the reasons.

Did I Write Enough Words?

This passage is 262 words, 12 more than the minimum required.

Did I Complete the Task on Timer

The task was completed in less than 40 minutes.

COHERENCE AND COHESION

REVISION CHECKLIST

Coherence and Cohesion

 Did I write a thesis statement?

Did I write a topic sentence for each paragraph?

Did I write supporting details in each paragraph?

Did I write a conclusion?

Did I Write a Thesis Statement?

The last two sentences of the first paragraph, Fortunately, we are all free to choose which TV

programs we want to watch Laws are not necessary to help us decide, are the thesis statement.

They state the writer’s opinion, which is explained and supported in the body of the essay.

Did I Write a Topic Sentence for Each Paragraph?

The first sentence of each paragraph in the body of the essay (paragraphs 2, 3, and 4) is the

topic sentence.

Did I Write Supporting Details in Each Paragraph?

Each topic sentence is followed by details that support it.

Did I Write a conclusion?

The last paragraph is the conclusion. In this paragraph, the reader is reminded of the thesis,

that laws about violence on television are not necessary, and there is a recommendation. It is

better to let each individual make his or her own choice about what to watch.

Lexical Resource

REVISION CHECKLIST

Lexical Resource

Did I use transition words?

 Did I use a variety of vocabulary?

Did I Use Transition Words?

This passage uses appropriate transition words, for example:

Paragraph 2:  also-adds information

                 because of-shows cause and effect

Paragraph 3:  thus-shows cause and effect

                       also-adds information

Did I Use a variety of Vocabulary

This passage does not have too many repetitions of words. It uses a variety of ways to state

similar ideas, for example, block, protect, and avoidance used to convey the idea of not watching

certain programs

GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY

REVISION CHECKLIST

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

Did I use parallel structures?

Did I use a variety of sentence patterns?

 Did I use correct spelling and punctuation?

Did I Use Parallel Structures?

The fourth paragraph uses parallel structures. There are news programs for serious people

There are movies and cartoons for people who want to be entertained.

Did I Use a variety of Sentence Structures?

This passage uses a variety of sentence structures, for example:

Complex  While it is true that there is violence on television, each individual has

his or her own idea about how much is too much.

There are movies and cartoons for people who want to be entertained

Simple      Most newspapers publish a schedule of TV programs every day

There are news programs for serious people.

Compound-complex We each have our own ideas about what is too violent and what is

Did I Use Correct Spelling and Punctuation?

This passage has spelling or punctuation errors.

PRACTICE 1

General Training Task 2

Complete the essay by answering the questions that follow.

In many parts of the world, people are relying more and more on

prepared food from grocery stores or restaurants because they are too

busy to cook at home. This is a bad idea because home-cooked food is

much better for us.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 1………………in the first place, it is more nutritious than store 

Bought or restaurant food.it is also less expensive in addition to preparing

And eating home-cooked food help strengthen the family bond.

Home-cooked food has higher nutritional value than prepared food.

A lot of prepared food is high in sugar and fat. it is also not very fast,so 

It has lost nutritional value while sitting on the shelf waiting to be bought.

2……………..it often contains highly refined products. such as white

Flour, which is not as good for our health as whole grain products er.  

3 ……………. A restaurant meal. even at a fast-food restaurant, 

Is more expensive than a meal at home. Additionally, you have to tip the

server and pay for transportation to and from the restaurant Buying a pre-packaged meal at a grocery store is not any better. It costs a lot more than

buying the ingredients and preparing the meal yourself

Family ties store stronger when family members cock and eat meals

together. When family members prepare a meal together, they spend

time together. They have the chance to share ideas and discuss problems

4………….. They have fun as a family. Their relationships are stronger.

Home-cooked food is good for our health, our wallets, and car family

relationships. There is no reason to eat prepared food regularly

1 Choose the best thesis statement

Home-cooked food is better for us than prepared food in several was

B Home-cooked food takes time to prepare bat it tastes very good

C Home-cooked food requires following several steps

2 Choose the best transition word for this sentence

A However 

B in addition

C For instance

3. Choose the best topic sentence for this paragraph

Eating at a restaurant is not as simple as it looks

B Many people enjoy eating at restaurants

C exists a lot of money to buy prepared food

4  Choose the missing supporting detail

They  prepare healthy meals

B They learn to communicate with each other

C They may have a large or small family

 It is important to develop skills and talents and pursue interests.

It is important to spend time doing things that are enjoyable or

meaningful. A person who is unhappy at work, in addition, cannot be

considered successful no matter how big his salary is. A person who

spends evenings and weekends just sitting in front of the TV cannot be

considered successful, either.

Money and the material things it can buy maybe they one part of success,

but non-material things like relationships and self-fulfillment are just

as important.

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