Target 18 – Using a Revision Checklist
when you respond to the writing tasks you need to leave a few minutes at the end of
For each task to revise your writing you need to check that you responded to all parts of
the task. you need to make sure that your ideas are well organized and that you used
correction age and pronunciation Biere is a checklist that you can use and your
The wash you need to make sure you want and that you
revision
REVISION CHECKLIST
Responding to the Task
Dini, I complete the task
Did I write enough words
Did I complete the task on time?
Coherence and Cohesion
Didi write a thesis statement
Did I write a temple sentence for each paragraph
Did I write supporting details in each paragraph
Did I write a conclusion?
Lexical Resource
Did I use transition werden
Did use a variety of vocabulary?
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Die i vise parallel structures
Did use a variety of sentence patterns?
Did I use correct spelling and punctuation?
Look at the following model writing task and response from Tarrer Notice how the response
can be checked against the revision checklist.
Academic Task 2
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task
There should be hours to control the amount and ope of Holence
shown on television programs.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge
or experience
Write at least 250 words
While it is true that there is violence on television, each individual has
his or her own idea about how much is too much. Fortunately, we are
all free to choose which TV programs we want to watch Laws are not
necessary to help us decide.
It isn’t difficult to find out which programs are on TV at any given
time. Most newspapers publish a schedule of TV programs every day.
Also, anyone who watches TV regularly knows which programs she likes
and which she doesn’t like. She knows what kinds of programs each
different channel tends to have. Because of this, it’s easy for everyone
to avoid violent programs if they want to.
Modern technology has given us a tool for controlling the TV
programs we see. Most TVs can be programmed to block certain
channels. Thus, parents have a way to protect their children from
seeing shows that are too violent. Adults can also use this technology
to avoid seeing programs that they don’t want to see.
The best thing about TV is that there is a variety of programs. There
are news programs for serious people. There are movies and cartoons
for people who want to be entertained. A variety of TV programs
show violence.
needs to be protected, even if that means allowing some of them to
We each have our own ideas about what is too violent and what
isn’t. It would be difficult to make laws about violence on TV that would
satisfy everybody. It is better to let each individual make his or her own
choice about what to watch.
Responding to the Task
REVISION CHECKLIST
Responding to the Task
Did I complete the task?
Did I write enough words?
Did I complete the task on time?
Did 1 Complete the Task?
The task asks the writer to agree or disagree with the statement. The last sentence of the first
necessary to help us decide, states the writer’s disagreement. The task
also asks for reasons and examples. The second, third, and fourth paragraphs each explain
the reason for the writer’s opinion, and they include examples to explain and support the reasons.
Did I Write Enough Words?
This passage is 262 words, 12 more than the minimum required.
Did I Complete the Task on Timer
The task was completed in less than 40 minutes.
COHERENCE AND COHESION
REVISION CHECKLIST
Coherence and Cohesion
Did I write a thesis statement?
Did I write a topic sentence for each paragraph?
Did I write supporting details in each paragraph?
Did I write a conclusion?
Did I Write a Thesis Statement?
The last two sentences of the first paragraph, Fortunately, we are all free to choose which TV
programs we want to watch Laws are not necessary to help us decide, are the thesis statement.
They state the writer’s opinion, which is explained and supported in the body of the essay.
Did I Write a Topic Sentence for Each Paragraph?
The first sentence of each paragraph in the body of the essay (paragraphs 2, 3, and 4) is the
topic sentence.
Did I Write Supporting Details in Each Paragraph?
Each topic sentence is followed by details that support it.
Did I Write a conclusion?
The last paragraph is the conclusion. In this paragraph, the reader is reminded of the thesis,
that laws about violence on television are not necessary, and there is a recommendation. It is
better to let each individual make his or her own choice about what to watch.
Lexical Resource
REVISION CHECKLIST
Lexical Resource
Did I use transition words?
Did I use a variety of vocabulary?
Did I Use Transition Words?
This passage uses appropriate transition words, for example:
Paragraph 2: also-adds information
because of-shows cause and effect
Paragraph 3: thus-shows cause and effect
also-adds information
Did I Use a variety of Vocabulary
This passage does not have too many repetitions of words. It uses a variety of ways to state
similar ideas, for example, block, protect, and avoidance used to convey the idea of not watching
certain programs
GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY
REVISION CHECKLIST
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Did I use parallel structures?
Did I use a variety of sentence patterns?
Did I use correct spelling and punctuation?
Did I Use Parallel Structures?
The fourth paragraph uses parallel structures. There are news programs for serious people
There are movies and cartoons for people who want to be entertained.
Did I Use a variety of Sentence Structures?
This passage uses a variety of sentence structures, for example:
Complex While it is true that there is violence on television, each individual has
his or her own idea about how much is too much.
There are movies and cartoons for people who want to be entertained
Simple Most newspapers publish a schedule of TV programs every day
There are news programs for serious people.
Compound-complex We each have our own ideas about what is too violent and what is
Did I Use Correct Spelling and Punctuation?
This passage has spelling or punctuation errors.
PRACTICE 1
General Training Task 2
Complete the essay by answering the questions that follow.
In many parts of the world, people are relying more and more on
prepared food from grocery stores or restaurants because they are too
busy to cook at home. This is a bad idea because home-cooked food is
much better for us.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
1………………in the first place, it is more nutritious than store
Bought or restaurant food.it is also less expensive in addition to preparing
And eating home-cooked food help strengthen the family bond.
Home-cooked food has higher nutritional value than prepared food.
A lot of prepared food is high in sugar and fat. it is also not very fast,so
It has lost nutritional value while sitting on the shelf waiting to be bought.
2……………..it often contains highly refined products. such as white
Flour, which is not as good for our health as whole grain products er.
3 ……………. A restaurant meal. even at a fast-food restaurant,
Is more expensive than a meal at home. Additionally, you have to tip the
server and pay for transportation to and from the restaurant Buying a pre-packaged meal at a grocery store is not any better. It costs a lot more than
buying the ingredients and preparing the meal yourself
Family ties store stronger when family members cock and eat meals
together. When family members prepare a meal together, they spend
time together. They have the chance to share ideas and discuss problems
4………….. They have fun as a family. Their relationships are stronger.
Home-cooked food is good for our health, our wallets, and car family
relationships. There is no reason to eat prepared food regularly
1 Choose the best thesis statement
Home-cooked food is better for us than prepared food in several was
B Home-cooked food takes time to prepare bat it tastes very good
C Home-cooked food requires following several steps
2 Choose the best transition word for this sentence
A However
B in addition
C For instance
3. Choose the best topic sentence for this paragraph
Eating at a restaurant is not as simple as it looks
B Many people enjoy eating at restaurants
C exists a lot of money to buy prepared food
4 Choose the missing supporting detail
They prepare healthy meals
B They learn to communicate with each other
C They may have a large or small family
It is important to develop skills and talents and pursue interests.
It is important to spend time doing things that are enjoyable or
meaningful. A person who is unhappy at work, in addition, cannot be
considered successful no matter how big his salary is. A person who
spends evenings and weekends just sitting in front of the TV cannot be
considered successful, either.
Money and the material things it can buy maybe they one part of success,
but non-material things like relationships and self-fulfillment are just
as important.
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Grammar and vocabulary errors
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